Would you say this is a poem, will you leave your thoughts
Perfect Girl
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Thursday, 12th of August 2010 12:29:45 AM
Untitled No matter how the words Flowery can be, They Perfect Girl are but words so pointless,
Unless the beauty comes
From what is Registered User on the page.
The graves in marble stone,
Too the palaces Joined: Saturday, 24th of April 2010, 01:20:22 for dead,
The same we medals give,
Even though they do not Posts: 529 know.
A pretty vase that empty sits,
Give it flowers Viewed 12225 times please,
Let a few more eyes gaze over it
Before it dies like
we.
For our traditions fade,
Our patriotism vanes/>But for the art, immortal is,
when crafted for its sake
Honey Chocolate Bear
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Friday, 13th of August 2010 09:01:19 AM
i think this is just a common saying. please be more poetic Honey Chocolate Bear before you call something as poem Registered User Joined: Monday, 26th of April 2010, 14:46:06 Posts: 1940 Viewed 4094 times
BUTTER & TOAST
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Saturday, 14th of August 2010 10:23:36 AM
now you must not heed the critics and their pointers on the use BUTTER & TOAST of syntax or any other grammatical ''errors.'' the poem is as it should be Registered User so don't change it unless YOU feel something needs the editing. it is a Joined: Tuesday, 27th of April 2010, 19:03:50 beautiful truthstone in the rock garden of poetic works thank you my Posts: 713 friend Viewed 12896 times
Hazle
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Sunday, 15th of August 2010 03:26:17 AM
It is amazing, fantastic, fantabulous, cool, tremendous, Hazle beautiful. Registered User I thing you should submit it to a newspaper and the will print it for you Joined: Thursday, 10th of June 2010, 04:44:49 if they like it. Posts: 1354 Viewed 1110 times
Mushroom
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Monday, 16th of August 2010 01:14:48 PM
soso but give it more rhythem and sense of youre heart then Mushroom people can relate ti it and it will be great Registered User Joined: Sunday, 9th of May 2010, 01:52:23 Posts: 498 Viewed 5214 times
Fun Buns
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Tuesday, 17th of August 2010 08:46:45 PM
yea Fun Buns Registered User Joined: Monday, 7th of June 2010, 01:01:01 Posts: 1667 Viewed 7057 times
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